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Paradoxes

Paradoxes

For discussing our favorite paradoxes, from philosophy to science and back again. Blog at www.paradoxtalk.com

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Posted byWritergirlin/paradoxes-Apr 07 at 7:29 PM

I wrote a thing (again).

Paradox Story

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Ok, I did a quick edit of the story from yesterday, making the characters more consistent and removing some unnecessary bits. Now I'm ready for you to tell me what you think.

Comments2
  • SaerynApr 08 at 7:36 AM

    I am no editor by any means but I easily imagined it all in my mind. Your description is concise, filled with detail. You ramped up, but possibly some more rhythm before hitting the first long attention grabbing sentence. Formatting on the dialogue is needed to make it easier to read, especially with the quick back and forth sections.

    I liked it! Modern cognitive fantasy!

    • WritergirlApr 08 at 11:46 AM

      Thank you! I noticed that about the dialogue too, but for some reason I forgot to change it. Good note with the pacing, I'll try to come up with something!

Paradoxes

Paradoxes

For discussing our favorite paradoxes, from philosophy to science and back again. Blog at www.paradoxtalk.com

143 members
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